Wednesday, February 18, 2015

See Through

I feel
the pane
beneath my
finger tips
They glide
like they're
moving
on soft velvet
But there's
no rhythm
no beat
I sense 
that it's
my insides
lying dormant
and wishing 
for the sun
If you hold
the pane
to the light
I wonder
if you can see
right through me

-February 2015




24 comments:

  1. Haha! I hope we can all see through our own protective panes, but not let everyone!

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  2. Oh do I love those closing lines. What a cool response to the prompt. I had a hard time thinking of anything but this is perfect - love the fingers moving as if on velvet.

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  3. This is such an introspective sensory poem...beautiful blog here! :)

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    1. Thank you, Hannah! And thank you for making a visit :)

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  4. I like this a lot, Torie. Very intense...and I like the double meanings that come to my mind as I read the last six lines. Very cleverly written - really.

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    1. Oh, thank you so much, Mary!! I really appreciate your comments :)

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  5. Powerful and beautiful, the wonder captured in your words the sense of not quite being able to feel what you need.

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  6. This feels like a double bind - aching to be seem but cautious as to who will look through...what an insightful poem

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    1. Thank you so much for your comment and visit, Jae Rose!

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  7. I know that feeling, of being as clear as glass.

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    1. Totally :) Thank you for stopping by, GL!

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  8. Great symbolism. There are some that can see straight through us...

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    1. There definitely are, Moonie. Thank you :)

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  9. Lovely poem. I like the play on the word pane - pain. Beautiful response to this prompt.

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    1. Thank you so much, Myrna :) Nice to you for a visit :)

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  10. 'Insides wishing for sun' easy to sense ...they shining through....nice one

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  11. I admire the format very much, the meaning of being transparent for others ~ Nicely done Torie ~

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  12. Good to see you, Grace :) Thank you!

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