Wednesday, February 18, 2015

See Through

I feel
the pane
beneath my
finger tips
They glide
like they're
moving
on soft velvet
But there's
no rhythm
no beat
I sense 
that it's
my insides
lying dormant
and wishing 
for the sun
If you hold
the pane
to the light
I wonder
if you can see
right through me

-February 2015




Posted by at

24 comments:

  1. SusanFebruary 18, 2015 at 4:11 PM

    Haha! I hope we can all see through our own protective panes, but not let everyone!

    ReplyDelete
  2. Sherry Blue SkyFebruary 18, 2015 at 5:06 PM

    Oh do I love those closing lines. What a cool response to the prompt. I had a hard time thinking of anything but this is perfect - love the fingers moving as if on velvet.

    ReplyDelete
  3. HannahFebruary 18, 2015 at 6:06 PM

    This is such an introspective sensory poem...beautiful blog here! :)

    ReplyDelete
    Replies
    1. TorieFebruary 18, 2015 at 10:01 PM

      Thank you, Hannah! And thank you for making a visit :)

      Delete
  4. MaryFebruary 18, 2015 at 6:21 PM

    I like this a lot, Torie. Very intense...and I like the double meanings that come to my mind as I read the last six lines. Very cleverly written - really.

    ReplyDelete
    Replies
    1. TorieFebruary 18, 2015 at 10:03 PM

      Oh, thank you so much, Mary!! I really appreciate your comments :)

      Delete
  5. Sumana RoyFebruary 18, 2015 at 11:16 PM

    see through indeed!!...lovely..

    ReplyDelete
  6. alan1704February 19, 2015 at 2:42 AM

    Powerful and beautiful, the wonder captured in your words the sense of not quite being able to feel what you need.

    ReplyDelete
  7. Jae RoseFebruary 19, 2015 at 5:40 AM

    This feels like a double bind - aching to be seem but cautious as to who will look through...what an insightful poem

    ReplyDelete
    Replies
    1. TorieFebruary 19, 2015 at 1:09 PM

      Thank you so much for your comment and visit, Jae Rose!

      Delete
  8. Gen Giggles February 19, 2015 at 6:10 AM

    I know that feeling, of being as clear as glass.

    ReplyDelete
  9. UnknownFebruary 19, 2015 at 6:27 AM

    Great symbolism. There are some that can see straight through us...

    ReplyDelete
  10. Myrna R.February 19, 2015 at 7:55 AM

    Lovely poem. I like the play on the word pane - pain. Beautiful response to this prompt.

    ReplyDelete
    Replies
    1. TorieFebruary 19, 2015 at 1:11 PM

      Thank you so much, Myrna :) Nice to you for a visit :)

      Delete
  11. humbirdFebruary 19, 2015 at 10:42 AM

    'Insides wishing for sun' easy to sense ...they shining through....nice one

    ReplyDelete
  12. GraceFebruary 19, 2015 at 2:22 PM

    I admire the format very much, the meaning of being transparent for others ~ Nicely done Torie ~

    ReplyDelete
  13. TorieFebruary 20, 2015 at 7:12 AM

    Good to see you, Grace :) Thank you!

    ReplyDelete

Subscribe to: Post Comments (Atom)