Wednesday, December 17, 2014

I Listen Outside

Is there nothing here
in this dawn
I listen outside
as the rain drips on
and on and on
Like the birds
that flap 
their wings
I listen outside
just to hear
their voices sing
Some are gone
taking cover
beneath a leaf
While others dance
and I breathe in
the relief
I listen outside
as the rain
drips free
I have many things
left to discover
inside of me


-December 2014




I wrote this for Poets United Midweek Motif ~ Music

24 comments:

  1. Sweet! Finding those thigs walks through lonliness and fear and relief and joy. I truly like this and its feeling of continuence.

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    1. Thank you so much, Susan! I appreciate your kind words and your visit :)

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  2. and when you discover those wonderful things inside of you, the dawn will have so much more to offer

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    1. Yes, indeed! Thanks for making a visit, Vandana :)

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  4. I love the music of the natural world. And LOVE your closing lines! Such a cool journey we are on in this life.

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    1. Yes, yes! The journey is filled with surprises :) Thank you, Sherry :)

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  5. There is always more to find...outside but more importantly inside ourselves...and I agree writing is bliss...like birdsong and fresh rain

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    1. Such nice words, Jae Rose! Thank you so much :)

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  6. We often amaze ourselves at the gifts that we find within us. The secret is to use them wisely. Great piece Torie.

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  7. Really beautifully written. :) I reminds me of the Spring where I live. The rain always seems to come down and it rarely ever lets up. So I often listen to the same story that you've said by opening a window.

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    1. Thank you, Ken :) It's so nice to know when something we've written can bring back such a nice memory :)

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  8. Ah, the music of the rain is one of the most beautiful melodies of all!

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  9. Wonderful poem about the song of nature.

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    1. Nature tells us so much when we take the time to listen! Good day to you, GL :)

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  10. I hope my comment wasn't lost...I can't remember word for word but you have created a beautiful..life affirming piece

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    1. No, you're comment wasn't lost Jae Rose :) I moderate my comments and got a little too busy yesterday, haha! Thank you for more nice words :)

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  11. Listening to nature always makes my soul sing...this is a lyrical poem that reminds me of hope!

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    1. I love the sounds of nature :) Thank you for your visit, Donna!

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  12. Self discovery is a never ending process ... very beautifully written :-)

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    1. Thank you, Amrit :) Thank you for the visit!

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