Wednesday, October 14, 2015

Consumed

There's a light
in the road
and it's starting
to dim
Would it
have stayed
longer
if I hadn't licked
all the salt
off the rim
The light's
been blinding
Have the
shadows
been binding me
behind my back
You tell me
all you see
is fading
into black
You're losing
the salt
in the air
But I 
still see
the gold strands
waving in
your hair
Why can't you
feel it
the way 
that I do
You leave me
alone
each time
you let
the darkness
consume you

-October 2015

22 comments:

  1. Sometimes, I think the darkness just has to have its way with us for a while--your writing is beautiful!

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    1. Thank you, Audrey! Maybe you're right. I guess we do kind of need it to appreciate the light :)

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  2. Such a beautifully haunting poem :D :D especially love the closing lines.

    Lots of love,
    Sanaa

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    1. Thank you, Sanaa! Good to see you again :)

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  3. It has to bitter to live with those that leave us for darkness.. Love how you used salt (tears?) and the embedded rhymes.

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    1. Thank you, Bjorn. It is challenging at times to cope with those in our lives who battle depression. But we have to keep fighting the fight and hope that the dark times never stay for too long. Thanks again for your visit :)

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  4. This seems to be about depression. Someone lets the darkness consume them. I do hope that they find a way to let light in.

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    1. Me too, Mary. Me too. Thanks for the visit :)

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  5. Such yearning? "You leave me alone each time you let the darkness consume you." is so true about depression, addiction - so many faces of darkness. I hope with Mary for emergence of the one you yearn for.

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    1. Thank you for taking the time to visit and for leaving a thoughtful comment today, Victoria :)

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  6. Sometimes we reach out to people...wish them gold but if they are not ready we can never 'succeed' - it is admirable to keep trying because one day it will...

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    1. Yeah, it does help to keep trying. We have to, right? That's what loving is. Thanks, Jae Rose. Nice to see you!

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  7. touching and deep, i love the way it flows and ends.

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    1. Thank you, Natasa :) Glad you liked it!

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  8. "You leave me alone each time you let the darkness consume you" I connected with this line personally. Oh, the things we leave behind when the darkness comes.

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    1. It's true. And hard. But we always seem to make it through the dark times :) Thanks for making a visit, Gail :)

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  9. 'But I
    still see
    the gold strands
    waving in
    your hair' ~ nice, someone supporting the person in darkness, ~ hope here and light.

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    1. Sometimes it's hard for the other person to see the support, but we still have to keep on supporting! Thanks for your comment, humbird :)

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  10. I don't know if any of the "if only's" help that kind of dimming of the light. We stand by, though, don't we? The images you use truly moved me.

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    1. I'm glad to know you were moved by my poem, Susan. Good to see you :) Thanks for stopping by!

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  11. this reminds me of a gin and tonic with a glass rimmed with salt. i used to have one of these when in a dark mood. :)
    haunting poem. i think anyone with depression needs all the support they have. not just a glass of gin.

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    1. I agree with you, dsnake1. I find that it's often difficult for some to see that the support is there. Almost as if they're undeserving of it or something. I appreciate you making a visit :)

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