The walls
don't seem
to dry
these days
Sometimes
it's too easy
to get lost
in your
charming ways
But I keep
breathing in
all the fumes
It's still hard
to believe
they've been
coming
from you
I've been
suffocating
looking for air
I keep reaching
for your hand
but you're
never there
Each time
I open
a window
to let
the light in
You slam it
and lock it
up tight
once again
-May 2015
ouch...that's surely a suffocating place to be....
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DeleteVery nice poem evokes a human situation skillfully. The two-and-three word lines work very well, I think.
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Thank you, Nissa!
DeleteYikes. Dont get too poisoned.
ReplyDeleteThere is an odd mix of emotion in this - the reaching for them, but them shutting you up tight. I am not sure how I feel with that.
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Deletehow hard it is sometimes to give hope to someone we truly love:(
ReplyDeleteSo very true, Vandana! Thank you :)
DeleteThe suffocation is pressing in this poem...one day I hope s/he finds the courage to walk away and sit in peace in the air and the sun
ReplyDeleteThank you, Jae Rose :) I hope so too.
DeleteInhale. Exhale. Ah, those fumes. Glorious poem.
ReplyDeleteThank you, C.C. Nice to see you :)
DeleteThe claustrophobia of being locked in... smothered by the walls is so tangible in your poem here.
ReplyDeleteThank you for that, Bjorn!
DeleteThis hits close to home as I am watching someone seemingly trapped in a stifling relationship. Hard to know that only she can make her way out.
ReplyDeleteI've found that we're not meant to see things until we are ready for them. But we must keep our eyes open. Good to see you, Sherry :) Thanks for coming by.
DeleteThe poisons some relationships can give off and yet we cannot tear ourselves away...powerful words!
ReplyDeleteSo true, Donna! Thank you :)
DeleteWell expressed...
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DeleteThis poem leaves me breathless and feeling suffocated. Having someone slam the window that you open is a painful experience...I do wonder if the person is worth it if he/she creates such a noxious environment.
ReplyDeleteSo much to think about! Thanks for sharing your thoughts, Mary :)
DeleteOh that has a lot of pain in it...
ReplyDeleteThanks for taking the time to comment :)
DeleteCould be a personification of jealousy. But the suffocation in your poem is so strong, I needed to open my window after reading
ReplyDeleteWell I hope you didn't feel too suffocated for long! I do appreciate your visit, totomai :)
DeleteThis left me cold and worn, much like the speaker I think.
ReplyDeleteOh, I like your insight, GL!!
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